I enjoyed the second one best; the suggestions of a story behind the glimpse in the haiku.
Thank you, poetry-diary. I tried to connect them both through a feeling of loss.
Wonderful set, although sad! I like them both.
Thank you, Barbara!
Well I didn't write for this prompt, but you did ~ I like the use of empty feeder, speaks of loss clearly ~Grace
Thanks, Grace. I hope you write for it too!
Sad and beautiful at the same time. I enjoyed them both very much. Thank you.
Thanks for reading, Ellecee! :-)
I too liked the "empty feeder" last line -- it really completed the haiku.P.S. You have my favorite blog header in the world!
Haha thank you, Judith. I'm quite obsessed with gnomes.
These are lovely, but sad The "empty feeder" struck me.
Oh, I know. Me too!
This sounds like Humming Bird is an old Indian chief. But that's just my insane imagination. Wonderful poem.
Haha that would be a good name for a Chief.
I like the relationship between the two parts...the evidence of a visit reminding of a more familiar absence.
Thanks, Jsck. Glad you saw that :-)
I loved the 2nd one ... so full of love :-)
Oh, yes :-)Perhaps a longing moreso.
Awesome set ... the second is adorable. First visit here ... nice blog.
Thank you so much, Kristjaan :-D Glad you stopped by.
I would like to meet Humming Bird and learn more of his (or her) story!Hummingbird Heaven
Me too ;-)
I love both of them. I've been filling my 3 feeders almost daily as all those northern hummers are heading my way. I've been using 10 pounds of sugar every week or two. Check out the song "Hummingbird" by Seals and Crofts. A blast to my past. xoxohttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_QoVAQUEDT0
Awe :-) They are precious!
Hummingbird, the tiny wonder! Nice haiku!!
Thank you, Dark Angel!
Excellent haiku!
Thank you so much, Smarkan.
What an etherial looking hummingbird. They fascinate me. So delicate. I love how the loss felt in the first is explained in the second.
Definitely what I was going for, Annie :-)
Nice one, Ben. Hummingbirds are just such intriguing birds, aren't they? Loved these companion pieces.
You've found your way inside my head and now there's no way out!
I enjoyed the second one best; the suggestions of a story behind the glimpse in the haiku.
ReplyDeleteThank you, poetry-diary. I tried to connect them both through a feeling of loss.
DeleteWonderful set, although sad! I like them both.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Barbara!
DeleteWell I didn't write for this prompt, but you did ~
ReplyDeleteI like the use of empty feeder, speaks of loss clearly ~
Grace
Thanks, Grace. I hope you write for it too!
DeleteSad and beautiful at the same time. I enjoyed them both very much. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading, Ellecee! :-)
DeleteI too liked the "empty feeder" last line -- it really completed the haiku.
ReplyDeleteP.S. You have my favorite blog header in the world!
Haha thank you, Judith. I'm quite obsessed with gnomes.
DeleteThese are lovely, but sad The "empty feeder" struck me.
ReplyDeleteOh, I know. Me too!
DeleteThis sounds like Humming Bird is an old Indian chief. But that's just my insane imagination. Wonderful poem.
ReplyDeleteHaha that would be a good name for a Chief.
DeleteI like the relationship between the two parts...the evidence of a visit reminding of a more familiar absence.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jsck. Glad you saw that :-)
DeleteI loved the 2nd one ... so full of love :-)
ReplyDeleteOh, yes :-)
DeletePerhaps a longing moreso.
Awesome set ... the second is adorable. First visit here ... nice blog.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Kristjaan :-D Glad you stopped by.
DeleteI would like to meet Humming Bird and learn more of his (or her) story!
ReplyDeleteHummingbird Heaven
Me too ;-)
DeleteI love both of them. I've been filling my 3 feeders almost daily as all those northern hummers are heading my way. I've been using 10 pounds of sugar every week or two. Check out the song "Hummingbird" by Seals and Crofts. A blast to my past. xoxo
ReplyDeletehttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_QoVAQUEDT0
Awe :-) They are precious!
DeleteHummingbird, the tiny wonder! Nice haiku!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Dark Angel!
DeleteExcellent haiku!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Smarkan.
DeleteWhat an etherial looking hummingbird. They fascinate me. So delicate. I love how the loss felt in the first is explained in the second.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely what I was going for, Annie :-)
DeleteNice one, Ben. Hummingbirds are just such intriguing birds, aren't they? Loved these companion pieces.
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