I enjoyed the second one best; the suggestions of a story behind the glimpse in the haiku.
Thank you, poetry-diary. I tried to connect them both through a feeling of loss.
Wonderful set, although sad! I like them both.
Thank you, Barbara!
Well I didn't write for this prompt, but you did ~ I like the use of empty feeder, speaks of loss clearly ~Grace
Thanks, Grace. I hope you write for it too!
Sad and beautiful at the same time. I enjoyed them both very much. Thank you.
Thanks for reading, Ellecee! :-)
I too liked the "empty feeder" last line -- it really completed the haiku.P.S. You have my favorite blog header in the world!
Haha thank you, Judith. I'm quite obsessed with gnomes.
These are lovely, but sad The "empty feeder" struck me.
Oh, I know. Me too!
This sounds like Humming Bird is an old Indian chief. But that's just my insane imagination. Wonderful poem.
Haha that would be a good name for a Chief.
I like the relationship between the two parts...the evidence of a visit reminding of a more familiar absence.
Thanks, Jsck. Glad you saw that :-)
I loved the 2nd one ... so full of love :-)
Oh, yes :-)Perhaps a longing moreso.
Awesome set ... the second is adorable. First visit here ... nice blog.
Thank you so much, Kristjaan :-D Glad you stopped by.
I would like to meet Humming Bird and learn more of his (or her) story!Hummingbird Heaven
Me too ;-)
I love both of them. I've been filling my 3 feeders almost daily as all those northern hummers are heading my way. I've been using 10 pounds of sugar every week or two. Check out the song "Hummingbird" by Seals and Crofts. A blast to my past. xoxohttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_QoVAQUEDT0
Awe :-) They are precious!
Hummingbird, the tiny wonder! Nice haiku!!
Thank you, Dark Angel!
Thank you so much, Smarkan.
What an etherial looking hummingbird. They fascinate me. So delicate. I love how the loss felt in the first is explained in the second.
Definitely what I was going for, Annie :-)
Nice one, Ben. Hummingbirds are just such intriguing birds, aren't they? Loved these companion pieces.
You've found your way inside my head and now there's no way out!