Saturday, September 22, 2012

A Hummingbird Haiku & Senryu

hummingbird echo
smell of nectar in the air
an empty feeder.

I knew Humming Bird
we walked and sang together
like young lovers do.

 
Prompt by Haiku Heights, word "hummingbird"

31 comments:

  1. I enjoyed the second one best; the suggestions of a story behind the glimpse in the haiku.

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    1. Thank you, poetry-diary. I tried to connect them both through a feeling of loss.

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  2. Wonderful set, although sad! I like them both.

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  3. Well I didn't write for this prompt, but you did ~

    I like the use of empty feeder, speaks of loss clearly ~

    Grace

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  4. Sad and beautiful at the same time. I enjoyed them both very much. Thank you.

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  5. I too liked the "empty feeder" last line -- it really completed the haiku.

    P.S. You have my favorite blog header in the world!

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    1. Haha thank you, Judith. I'm quite obsessed with gnomes.

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  6. These are lovely, but sad The "empty feeder" struck me.

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  7. This sounds like Humming Bird is an old Indian chief. But that's just my insane imagination. Wonderful poem.

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  8. I like the relationship between the two parts...the evidence of a visit reminding of a more familiar absence.

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  9. Awesome set ... the second is adorable. First visit here ... nice blog.

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    1. Thank you so much, Kristjaan :-D Glad you stopped by.

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  10. I would like to meet Humming Bird and learn more of his (or her) story!

    Hummingbird Heaven

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  11. I love both of them. I've been filling my 3 feeders almost daily as all those northern hummers are heading my way. I've been using 10 pounds of sugar every week or two. Check out the song "Hummingbird" by Seals and Crofts. A blast to my past. xoxo

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_QoVAQUEDT0

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  12. What an etherial looking hummingbird. They fascinate me. So delicate. I love how the loss felt in the first is explained in the second.

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  13. Nice one, Ben. Hummingbirds are just such intriguing birds, aren't they? Loved these companion pieces.

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