Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Five-Minute Poem

I wanted to do an exercise seeing how much of a poem I could write in five minutes.  Maybe we could all try it and get a theme going? ;-)

Light slow dances
with the ground.
Wind cuts in,
strikes fast
and dips.
Swing then waltz,
kissing grass blades
on their necks.
The earth is coy,
wants more before
a drought sets in.
But light and wind
have took their toll
leaving cracks through
what was whole.

11 comments:

  1. But whole never was all that...
    and the nut
    inside it's shell
    seems meatless
    and lacking in empathy
    for the tongue
    that reaches
    for a crevice of taste.

    Light is especially sweet
    spilling through your fractures.

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  2. Oh, wow. Great response. I'll try to me a more empathetic nut next time ;) But I didn't intend to say light was a bad thing. Moreover, what too much can leave you with.

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  3. Freakin' awesome, Ben. A perfectly perfect autumn poem. Fabulous imagery. xo

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  4. You're even more freakin' awesome, Marion :D

    Did I ever tell you that's the name of the county I live in? Marion :)

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  5. I didn't not take it as bad. And I think you're plenty empathetic. And plenty nuts :) I just wrote a quick poem. That was the assignment wasn't it???? Do I have the wrong classroom again? Uh....the dog ate my other poem.

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  6. Of course. I give you an A++ and FIVE gold stars ;-)

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  7. You live in Marion county! How synchronistic. We have parishes here, no counties. Mine is called Rapides Parish. (Rap-eeds). We've got to quit meeting like this. Tee-Hee...

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  8. ...leaving cracks through what was whole I
    left him there deep inside the rhyme of his
    own heart

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  9. Wonderful, Shauna. I love the idea of rhyming hearts.

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