Saturday, February 23, 2013

Once Upon a City Light

you owned the city lights
when I was once upon a time
a lost, devoted creature
mezmerized naively
by your glow.
 
shining in my imperfection
we touched hands and danced
the best way I knew how.
Recoleta Night, City Lights 2
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5 comments:

  1. Optimistic ExistentialistSunday, February 24, 2013 at 11:40:00 AM EST

    Awesome poem Mr. Ditty.

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  2. ElleceeSunday, February 24, 2013 at 12:32:00 PM EST

    I love the vulnerability in this poem, a place where love sometimes find us,,,"a lost and devoted creature"

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    1. Ben DittySunday, February 24, 2013 at 3:40:00 PM EST

      Yes, like the relationship where one cares more than the other.

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  3. AnonymousMonday, February 25, 2013 at 12:01:00 PM EST

    Wow @ the second line. Wistful, yet kind of self-deprecating.

    I really, really like the ending. Someone could be embarrassed or proud based on the "best way I knew how" line.

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  4. BerlinerinPoetMonday, February 25, 2013 at 7:05:00 PM EST

    "Shining in my imperfection" is great!

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