This is a good poem Ben, But I found your zen..your gift...it lies in the quirk, like me, that is what spins your wheels, more scifi, or fantasy or horror or just strange from the quaky vault some call your mind would be brilliant!
Oh, I know. Sometimes I just need to get out those romantic feelings :-)
Almost every mention of heart-plus-feeling is about heartbeats. You had a really, really good angle in this one.
Thank you, Jack. With the exception of the line on marrow. I argued with myself about including it. I'm still not sure.
Well, I think marrow and cholesterol were fantastically unique angles. Those, plus the absence of the word "beat," make this really work.
grrr! i fucking love this!i want it! ;)lisa
Well, you can print it out and have it ;-)
that's quite a touch!
Thanks, Aguilar! :-)
a different type of love poem. 'before your whispers broke theyears of bad cholesterol.
Very quirky. I like the cholesterol part too.
You've found your way inside my head and now there's no way out!