I sumbitted a few poems to Thrush Poetry Journal. The editors liked my voice but the poems were not accepted. I was a little sad because I've been a big fan of the publication and their use of social media. But, at least I get to share the pieces with you now. I hope you enjoy them.
Forged Within
It’s funny how one day
becomes a week,
becomes a month,
and soon a year
has passed where
we’re no different
from the last in
essence, yet
appearances will
tell a different story;
we won’t see the crows feet
Looking from inside ourselves
but others can and never understand
that every imperfection has a story-
laughter, love, a loss-
and we alone will see
true beauty forged within.
Pounding Rain
Cigar smoke
in the pounding rain;
her hand, outstretched
a distant light,
sifting through the plume
with ashy fingernails
she strokes my hair
reminds me,
she still cares
in hazy, blind surroundings,
Burning from the flame,
Her lips put out.
I really like what you did with the punctuation on forged within, those are good poems.
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Thanks, twin. That helps me feel better :)
DeleteIt's their loss.. These are great poems.. But I know the feeling of rejection.... Love your poems..Susie
ReplyDeleteThanks, Susie :-)
DeleteYou'll get 'em next time. As for this time, we all get to see the work now, so, thank you.
ReplyDeleteI sure hope so, Jack. Glad you got to see it :)
DeleteThere is a sense of reflection and substance in both this pieces..growth and knowledge..Pounding Rain was particularly lingering..like smoke..keep trying with the submissions..it will happen..jae
ReplyDeleteI'll try, Jae. It's just hard to find a publication that gets you.
Deleteooohh...i love both of these!
ReplyDeletemy favorite lines:
burning from the flame,
her lips put out.
would love love love a guy writing something like that for me.
Your comments always bring a smile to my face, Lisa :)
Deletelovely poems, ben. written in you delicate yet sublimely
ReplyDeletepowerful style. i feel a searching and a yearning in your
poetry, a hint of seeing beyond the obvious phsyicality [sp.?]
of a person.
Oo wow, best review/analysis I've ever had! Very touched by this.
Deletethose publishers will rue the day they didn't accept these!
ReplyDeleteHaha thank you.
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